The ground trembled underneath Siragon as he stood proudly on the castle's balconey, surveying his advancing army. The army that he had trained for nearly three years and the exact army that is sure to have never ending success. He drummed his fingers together and called out to the sea of razor sharp spears and black hooded figures. He could already taste trimphant.
"Are you all ready?" He roared. His stronge voice thundered, shaking the walls.
"YES SIR," came the eager replies.
"Then what are you waiting for Aixies?"
"It is TIME!" He screamed and he felt the army's impatient sturred.
Without a word, the army marched out together like a swarm of blood thirsty ants ready to attack their poor prey.
Swiveling around, Siragon clasped his hands together and whispered heartily,
"You'll see...."
It's alright. Kind of predictable, same usual fantasy stuff I come across. You have a lot of places in this prologue where you repeat phrases you don't have to keep using. You're trying to be too descriptive as well. That's a problem for most developing writers. Use less words to get your point across and your story becomes clearer.
For example, I'll switch this sentence around for you: "the army that he had trained for nearly three years and the exact army that is sure to have never ending success."
"The army he'd trained for years was now prepared for never ending success on the battlefield."
Sounds better, doesn't it? Be more clear with what you're saying and readers will connect.
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